Published April 7, 2005
i really miss my grandad
im sure he'll miss me too
in the sky with all the angels
when im down here with the crew
he's been away for many years now
i think of him quite alot
my mum says i look like him
but i don't know if i do or not
no matter what
if it's cold or hot
he will belong
in my heart
forever
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I think this would be better as "i think of him a lot" just so the rythm of the poem is continuous.
I liked the emotion you were trying to convey and you pulled it off well. This is a good start, keep posting!
awww! This is soooo sad! I liked this peom especially this bit
Keep writing!